Keep it coming, you’ll get better as you go on. Sex Take time to proofread your story. It makes the story much easier and enjoyable to read. Good luck.anonymous readerReport 2011-02-19 12:31:57Great start, good pacing and interesting characters. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. Keep it coming, you’ll get better as you go on. Writing is like everything else, practice makes perfect and if you work at it you can acheive greatness.«12» It makes the story much easier and enjoyable to read. First, proofread your work several times. You’ll be fine.anonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:51:53very niceeeee.plz continueanonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:38:57PLEASE follow the advice of senorlongo. Writing is like everything else, practice makes perfect and if you work at it you can acheive greatness.«12» You’ll be fine.anonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:51:53very niceeeee.plz continueanonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:38:57PLEASE follow the advice of senorlongo. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience.
