hah and again…paragraphsAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-31 00:42:33paragraphs pleasefbaileyReport 2008-08-30 12:44:59You really need to use a spell checker and then you need to proofread your work before submitting it. Porn sex hah and again…paragraphsAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-31 00:42:33paragraphs pleasefbaileyReport 2008-08-30 12:44:59You really need to use a spell checker and then you need to proofread your work before submitting it. this is a story not a movie details help the readers to involve in the scene as if they are watching it (some may masturbate) try to concentrate in ur next story also ur sex partner didn’t say much asif he is a machine. 6 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-09-01 22:06:45the plot is nice but I think u r missing details ! 6 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-09-01 22:06:45the plot is nice but I think u r missing details ! its too short. its too short. You need to use apostrophes. What I did read was okay but I had to stop because it was just too hard to ignore all the little stuff. The letter i needs to be capitalized. hah and again…paragraphsAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-31 00:42:33paragraphs pleasefbaileyReport 2008-08-30 12:44:59You really need to use a spell checker and then you need to proofread your work before submitting it.
