The technical stuff like grammar, punctuation and credible detail writing can be had by asking your english teachers for some help.anonymous readerReport 2012-10-07 02:08:56starts off good. then reality breaks and stupidity sets in.kcrit42qReport 2012-10-04 23:34:29it was good but needs workanonymous readerReport 2012-10-04 23:08:13No. Sex vedio details are what make it a better story-at least, in my opinion. Pay attention to my criticism. If you want your readers to not flee in disgust when suddenly reality is violated, then state from the beginning that your character will be “super.” Otherwise, when you state it later it seems like a cheap cop out.«12» Pay attention to my criticism. Pay attention to my criticism. Stupidity and mediocrity continues to exist because we coddle the weak. Keep writing, writing a great story comes from practicing your craft thru writing many stories. If you want your readers to not flee in disgust when suddenly reality is violated, then state from the beginning that your character will be “super.” Otherwise, when you state it later it seems like a cheap cop out.«12»
