My own two cents however, next time stick with the mother for part one, maybe having the daughter walk in on them for suspense. Sex the best thing you can do is delete and rewrite it using a good editor or ghost writer and add an endding.anonymous readerReport 2011-11-26 11:56:14TYPICAL FOR THIS SITE IT NEEDS A TOTAL REWRITE USING A GOOD EDITOR WAY TO MANY STUPID ERRORS.anonymous readerReport 2011-06-13 02:08:03i rather liked it and would like to see a part 2 some day 8/10Anonymous readerReport 2008-12-19 10:21:06man that was pretty ood take suggestions, part 2 pleaseAnonymous readerReport 2008-12-18 01:34:37Agreed, slow down and spell check. My own two cents however, next time stick with the mother for part one, maybe having the daughter walk in on them for suspense. My own two cents however, next time stick with the mother for part one, maybe having the daughter walk in on them for suspense. like most have said this was super rushed and needs to be two or three times longer with motre build up and details. My own two cents however, next time stick with the mother for part one, maybe having the daughter walk in on them for suspense. Part two should stick with the daughter and maybe some action from both women.«123»
