Hair color and/or style? Porn vedio Age? but im probably one of the only ones.«12» Age? love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. Age? Its a little labor intensive to read the way it is now. passable. Maybe try typing story into microsoft word then compy and paste.Anonymous readerReport 2009-12-04 01:46:48poorly written, and completely unbelievable. love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. but as much as id hate to admit it. but im probably one of the only ones.«12» What did the dress look like? it was perfect for a short little smut story. but im probably one of the only ones.«12» love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-04 02:12:03Other than such comments mentioned I think you need to work on character design, ok we get it the girl is goth and she is wearing a nice dress, what does she look like? but im probably one of the only ones.«12» but as much as id hate to admit it. it was perfect for a short little smut story.
