Add gratuitus sex to get more votes?cijababeReport 2011-03-08 03:16:25I loved it! Sex vedio All of your comments are my big thing, thank you again.hornyelkReport 2011-03-10 19:05:57I liked the changing viewpoints, which at first were a bit unclear. Good writing, interesting plot, incest handled in a way that kept me reading,. 22 comments«12345»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-20 08:22:23RpB/M: WTF! lol
horny-I think maintaining a rotation through the characters is a good idea and ID’ing each POV change would probabily been the biggest improvement. The sentences were a little short and choppy but that added to the style, and it was highly entertaining. OHT- Thanks for the support, it’s always appreciated but I thought even the least tactful had something to say worth thinking about. The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters. I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. The spacing threw me a little but not enough to stop reading or to spoil my enjoyment. All of your comments are my big thing, thank you again.hornyelkReport 2011-03-10 19:05:57I liked the changing viewpoints, which at first were a bit unclear. u’r critics a PITA! I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. Damn the consequences and space each paragraph as much as you want. Top marks from me! Cija-The story evolved like a shack turning into a mansion, my biggest regret
