8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 22:41:19some little details you need to work on are what his cum tasted like or what it felt like being fucked but overall i like your talent at writing this story and you are fairly young so those mistakes are alrightanonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 12:33:23longer story and better detail. Porn vedio part 1 was almost impossible to read. part 1 was almost impossible to read. great job!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-09 23:27:43Fucking great, got me going keep fighting.anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 23:07:06That was fucking amazing!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 14:03:54Great story. the spacing has drastically improved. Please do more!«12» Please do more!«12» great job!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-09 23:27:43Fucking great, got me going keep fighting.anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 23:07:06That was fucking amazing!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 14:03:54Great story. part 1 was almost impossible to read. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 22:41:19some little details you need to work on are what his cum tasted like or what it felt like being fucked but overall i like your talent at writing this story and you are fairly young so those mistakes are alrightanonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 12:33:23longer story and better detail. the spacing has drastically improved. great job!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-09 23:27:43Fucking great, got me going keep fighting.anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 23:07:06That was fucking amazing!anonymous readerReport 2012-03-05 14:03:54Great story. the spacing has drastically improved. Please do more!«12»
