ohh fuck!Anonymous readerReport 2014-10-15 18:04:31You know, the story is very good, but, the format needs a lot of work. Sex vedio Go to the library and pick up any novel. Remember every line of dialog is a new paragraph. Suggestion. Missed quotations make it hard to know where the descriptions end and the dialog begins. Go to the library and pick up any novel. Paragraphs help the reader know what is what. Of course two is the number 2. I guess that’s because it reminds me of my own young sexual experiences. 11 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2015-03-08 21:57:21please please more! You get the idea, keep writing, I’ll keep reading.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-01 01:50:02Very good story! I never fucked my dad, but I was a horny little girl and I did let neighbors and some of dad’s friends fuck me from the time I was about 11. Suggestion. Just scan thru it and see how they lay out the descriptions and the dialog of the characters. And the to, too, or two use. Missed quotations make it hard to know where the descriptions end and the dialog begins.
