My advice would be to start proofreading your work seriously. That’s really all I have to say about it. Sex (Part 1/2)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 19:38:00pplz my friend wants ppl to ask stuff or talk to her on ask.fm/akaErin ,,anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 10:32:55Great stuff keep it up have him fuck her ass
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SMS«123» If you really want positive ratings, then earn them. There’s plenty out there. There was also the issue that it became a little difficult to tell who was saying what at times. Not only that, but the dialogue felt pretty forced at times as well. Give them the attention they deserve and try to make them the best they can be. You may not be a professional author, as you said, but that is still no excuse to have such bad grammar. You do have a good story here and I think that you can definitely attract a good fanbase with this. That’s really all I have to say about it. But if you keep going about your writing as you currently are, then you’ll never reach that potential. I’m really not exaggerating when I say that it’s that bad. There was also the issue that it became a little difficult to tell who was saying what at times.
